Spring is coming. Everybody, wake up! Hibernation is over. Birds are singing in the woods. Girls are dancing under the tree. Boys are rolling on the lawn and chasing the butterflies. They are happy. I like running outside. When I feel a little bit tired, I lie on the ground and watch the sky. I look around and find a chipmunk is looking for food under the tree. Spring is warm and nice. I love spring.
修改后：
Spring is coming. Everything begin to come back to life, the long cold winter is over. Birds are singing in the woods. Some girls are dancing under the tree. Some boys are rolling on the grass and chasing the butterflies. They are happy. I like running outside. When I feel a little bit tired, I will lie on the grass and watch the sky. I look around and see a chipmunk looking for food under the tree. Spring is warm and nice. I love spring.
修改老师：Crystal 老师
三年级:冰封忍者
